Comments for cannish girl http://cannishgirl.wordpress.com poetry, fiction, drabble, excerpts, rough work Thu, 19 Jun 2008 14:12:31 +0000 http://wordpress.com/ hourly 1 Comment on Springtime, Alone by Undomesticated http://cannishgirl.wordpress.com/2008/03/23/springtime-alone/#comment-41 Undomesticated Thu, 19 Jun 2008 14:12:31 +0000 http://cannishgirl.wordpress.com/2008/03/23/springtime-alone/#comment-41 Somehow i missed the point. Probably lost in translation :) Anyway ... nice blog to visit. cheers, Undomesticated! Somehow i missed the point. Probably lost in translation :) Anyway … nice blog to visit.

cheers, Undomesticated!

]]> Comment on Woordbeests (after Theo Jansen’s Beach Animals) by This Sunday! « cannish girl http://cannishgirl.wordpress.com/2008/02/05/woordbeests-after-theo-jansens-beach-animals/#comment-37 This Sunday! « cannish girl Wed, 02 Apr 2008 00:47:14 +0000 http://cannishgirl.wordpress.com/?p=15#comment-37 [...] come out if you’re in Montreal this weekend. I’ll be reading a few poems (guess what one of them will be), as will a lot of talented budding [...] [...] come out if you’re in Montreal this weekend. I’ll be reading a few poems (guess what one of them will be), as will a lot of talented budding [...]

]]> Comment on Springtime, Alone by kevinoutofcontext http://cannishgirl.wordpress.com/2008/03/23/springtime-alone/#comment-33 kevinoutofcontext Mon, 24 Mar 2008 17:58:47 +0000 http://cannishgirl.wordpress.com/2008/03/23/springtime-alone/#comment-33 I wish I could accurately review poetry, because then I could tell you why I love this. I can't, unfortunately. But I do (love it, that is!) I wish I could accurately review poetry, because then I could tell you why I love this. I can’t, unfortunately. But I do (love it, that is!)

]]> Comment on Springtime, Alone by Pascal « j’aime la cité http://cannishgirl.wordpress.com/2008/03/23/springtime-alone/#comment-32 Pascal « j’aime la cité Mon, 24 Mar 2008 01:44:00 +0000 http://cannishgirl.wordpress.com/2008/03/23/springtime-alone/#comment-32 [...] March 23, 2008 This is what I did yesterday. (Well, I wrote the poem, but I also did what I wrote about, albeit with [...] [...] March 23, 2008 This is what I did yesterday. (Well, I wrote the poem, but I also did what I wrote about, albeit with [...]

]]> Comment on Grandmother by Allegra http://cannishgirl.wordpress.com/2008/03/06/grandmother/#comment-31 Allegra Sun, 09 Mar 2008 05:09:35 +0000 http://cannishgirl.wordpress.com/?p=27#comment-31 I LOVE this. Villanelles are exceedingly difficult to write, and even harder to write well. This was beautiful. Well done, Maddie. I LOVE this. Villanelles are exceedingly difficult to write, and even harder to write well. This was beautiful. Well done, Maddie.

]]> Comment on Year of the Rat by john http://cannishgirl.wordpress.com/2008/02/07/year-of-the-rat/#comment-29 john Wed, 27 Feb 2008 01:34:56 +0000 http://cannishgirl.wordpress.com/2008/02/07/year-of-the-rat/#comment-29 Very nice :D Very nice :D

]]> Comment on Magnetic poetry by gingatao! http://cannishgirl.wordpress.com/2008/02/16/magnetic-poetry/#comment-28 gingatao! Mon, 18 Feb 2008 11:53:38 +0000 http://cannishgirl.wordpress.com/?p=18#comment-28 Cool fridge half found half made concrete poems, great idea, Cool fridge half found half made concrete poems, great idea,

]]> Comment on Moving In by Dave http://cannishgirl.wordpress.com/2007/11/06/moving-in/#comment-27 Dave Fri, 15 Feb 2008 21:58:52 +0000 http://cannishgirl.wordpress.com/2007/11/06/moving-in/#comment-27 First paragraph is awkward, at first I wasn't sure who you meant by "she" and "her" in the second sentence. If possible you may try leaving one introduction until later. Again - the unspecific "her" is confusing when you're talking about the house which has no smell...except for the aura of "her" house. Whose house? Assuming Clara's. If so, why does it "still" cling to them if they just got there? From the way I read it, the description in paragraph 4 doesn't quite warrant the conclusion that "the whole place felt precariously arranged...etc." While it does sound unwelcoming, perhaps you'd be better off adding more description to give us that idea, instead of trying to tell us directly and giving us the chance to disagree with you. The word "anything" in the last sentence is unnecessary and sounds bad with "thing" a couple words before. Allie's mannerisms are great, right on target for a little girl. Also excellent choice of sandwich-type. First paragraph is awkward, at first I wasn’t sure who you meant by “she” and “her” in the second sentence. If possible you may try leaving one introduction until later.

Again – the unspecific “her” is confusing when you’re talking about the house which has no smell…except for the aura of “her” house. Whose house? Assuming Clara’s. If so, why does it “still” cling to them if they just got there?

From the way I read it, the description in paragraph 4 doesn’t quite warrant the conclusion that “the whole place felt precariously arranged…etc.” While it does sound unwelcoming, perhaps you’d be better off adding more description to give us that idea, instead of trying to tell us directly and giving us the chance to disagree with you.

The word “anything” in the last sentence is unnecessary and sounds bad with “thing” a couple words before.

Allie’s mannerisms are great, right on target for a little girl. Also excellent choice of sandwich-type.

]]> Comment on Woordbeests (after Theo Jansen’s Beach Animals) by gingatao! http://cannishgirl.wordpress.com/2008/02/05/woordbeests-after-theo-jansens-beach-animals/#comment-26 gingatao! Wed, 06 Feb 2008 10:00:32 +0000 http://cannishgirl.wordpress.com/?p=15#comment-26 "One day they will live on their own, walking away from criticism and dodging misinterpretation." “One day they will live on their own,
walking away from criticism and
dodging misinterpretation.”

]]> Comment on Woordbeests (after Theo Jansen’s Beach Animals) by mg http://cannishgirl.wordpress.com/2008/02/05/woordbeests-after-theo-jansens-beach-animals/#comment-25 mg Tue, 05 Feb 2008 14:38:23 +0000 http://cannishgirl.wordpress.com/?p=15#comment-25 the last bit is tacky. make it more abstract. the last bit is tacky. make it more abstract.

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